Copyediting Assault Vest Moltres Galar [QC 2/2] [GP 0/1]

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[SET]
Assault Vest (Moltres-Galar) @ Assault Vest
Ability: Berserk
EVs: 176 HP / 216 Def / 116 SpA
Modest Nature
- Hurricane
- Fiery Wrath
- Air Slash
- Sucker Punch

[SET COMMENTS]
* Assault Vest allow you to win matchups against strong Special attackers, like Volcanion and Iron Crown.
* Hurricane is Galarian Moltres' main Flying-type STAB move, hitting Grass-types like Ogergon-W, and Fighting-types like both Urshifu formes. Air Slash allow you to beat Encore Disable Iron Valiant, and is more accurate, allowing you to break Sneasler or Volcarona's Substitute.
* Fiery Wrath is a standard Dark-type STAB move allowing you to beat Pokemon such as Iron Crown, Pecharunt, and Cresselia.
* Sucker Punch allows you to win against Custap Berry users like Urshifu-S, and Skeledirge, as well as Liechi Berry Sneasler.
* The EV spread allows you to survive to Modest Choice Specs Porygon-Z Hyper Beam, as well as a Choice Band Haxorus Outrage.
* As Galarian Moltres struggles to beat bulky Fairy and Steel types like Sylveon, Primarina, Corviknight and Registeel, as well as Electric types like Iron Hands, then Steel types like Iron Crown and Metagross or Ground types like Ursaluna and Landorus-Therian, as well as Fire types like Volcanion or Volcarona are good partners for it.

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im going to assume this is in qc since you changed the post prefix
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I want to take another look after implement
[SET]
Assault Vest (Moltres-Galar) @ Assault Vest
Ability: Berserk
EVs: 176 HP / 216 Def / 116 SpA
Modest Nature
- Hurricane
- Fiery Wrath
- Air Slash
- Sucker Punch

[SET COMMENTS]
* Assault Vest allows you to survive strong SpA special attackers, (add comma) like Volcanion, Iron Crown, and Regidrago.
* Hurricane is the Galarian Moltres' main Flying-type STAB move, but Air Slash can be used when you need more precision such as against Substitute Volcarona or Sneasler or it does sufficient damages to be used instead of Hurricane. Using both also allows you to beat Encore Disable Iron Valiant. (This entire bullet needs rewriting. Mention what in the metagame you hit with hurricain then go into what air slash does specifically, will look into the individual sentences once more afterwards)
* Fiery Wrath is a standard Dark-type STAB move allowing you to beat Pokemon such as Iron Crown, Pecharunt, and Cresselia. (You always say 'STAB move' instead of STAB. Just 'STAB' refers to the boost itself)
* Sucker Punch allows you to win against Custap Berry users like Donphan, (add comma) or as well as Liechi Berry Sneasler. (Needs better examples for custap users)
* HP EVs coupled with Assault Vest make The EV spread allows you to survive to Modest Choice Specs Porygon-Z Hyper Beam, (add comma) and you tank a as well as a Choice Band Haxorus Outrage with 176 HP and 216 Def EVs.
* If Iron Valiant is Speed Booster, click Hurricane on turn 1, and switch to Air Slash on the second turn for a better precision. (This should be mentioned with the orignial air slash point)
* Bullet about usage tips

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1/2 when done
[SET]
Assault Vest (Moltres-Galar) @ Assault Vest
Ability: Berserk
EVs: 176 HP / 216 Def / 116 SpA
Modest Nature
- Hurricane
- Fiery Wrath
- Air Slash
- Sucker Punch

[SET COMMENTS]
* Assault Vest allow you to survive strong SpA Special attackers, like Volcanion, (remove comma) and Iron Crown, and Regidrago.
* Hurricane is Galarian Moltres' main Flying-type STAB move, hitting Grass-types like Ogergon-W, and Fighting-types like Both Urshifu formes. it can OHKO Ogerpon-W, 2HKO Urshifu under Berserk, and can 2HKO Volcanion.
* Air Slash allow you to beat Encore Disable Iron Valiant, and is more precise, allowing you to break Sneasler, Blaziken, or Volcarona's Substitute. (Blaziken is irrelevant in the tier)
* Fiery Wrath is a standard Dark-type STAB move allowing you to beat Pokemon such as Iron Crown, Pecharunt, and Cresselia.
* Sucker Punch allows you to win against Custap Berry users like Donphan, (remove comma) and Ursaluna-Bloodmoon, and Empoleon, as well as Liechi Berry Sneasler and Blaziken.
* The EV spread allows you to survive to Modest Choice Specs Porygon-Z Hyper Beam, as well as a Choice Band Haxorus Outrage.
* As Galarian Moltres struggles to beat bulky Fairy and Steel types like Sylveon, Primarina, Corviknight and Registeel, as well as Electric types like Iron Hands, then Steel types like Iron Crown and Metagross or Ground types like Ursaluna and Landorus-Therian are recommended are good partners for it.

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[SET]
Assault Vest (Moltres-Galar) @ Assault Vest
Ability: Berserk
EVs: 176 HP / 216 Def / 116 SpA
Modest Nature
- Hurricane
- Fiery Wrath
- Air Slash
- Sucker Punch

[SET COMMENTS]
* Assault Vest allow you to survive win matchups against strong Special attackers, like Volcanion and Iron Crown.
* Hurricane is Galarian Moltres' main Flying-type STAB move, hitting Grass-types like Ogergon-W, and Fighting-types like Bboth Urshifu formes. Air Slash allow you to beat Encore Disable Iron Valiant, and is more precise accurate, allowing you to break Sneasler or Volcarona's Substitute.
* Fiery Wrath is a standard Dark-type STAB move allowing you to beat Pokemon such as Iron Crown, Pecharunt, and Cresselia.
* Sucker Punch allows you to win against Custap Berry users like Donphan Urshifu-S (think Urshifu is a better example if you're mentioning custap users), and Skeledirge and Ursaluna-Bloodmoon (not as standard yet IMO), as well as Liechi Berry Sneasler.
* The EV spread allows you to survive to Modest Choice Specs Porygon-Z Hyper Beam, as well as a Choice Band Haxorus Outrage.
* As Galarian Moltres struggles to beat bulky Fairy and Steel types like Sylveon, Primarina, Corviknight and Registeel, as well as Electric types like Iron Hands, then Steel types like Iron Crown and Metagross or Ground types like Ursaluna and Landorus-Therian are good partners for it. None of these guys actually beat Corviknight reliably. In context of this analysis it sounds like mons like Volcarona and Volcanion wins versus most of these guys, so I'd add a Fire-type mention on that alone.

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ping when implemented and ill give a 2nd look Akeras
 
1/1 GP Team done
[SET]
Assault Vest (Moltres-Galar) @ Assault Vest
Ability: Berserk
EVs: 176 HP / 216 Def / 116 SpA
Modest Nature
- Hurricane
- Fiery Wrath
- Air Slash
- Sucker Punch

[SET COMMENTS]
* Assault Vest allow you Galarian Moltres to win matchups against strong special attackers, like Volcanion and Iron Crown.
* Hurricane is Galarian Moltres' Moltres's main Flying-type STAB move, hitting Grass-types like Ogergon-W (RC) and Fighting-types like both Urshifu formes.
 add a new bullet/line here and move move the fiery wrath point to here. decription order needs to follow the set order, and rn you go from move 1 to move 3 to move 2
* Air Slash allow you allows Galarian Moltres to beat Encore + Disable Iron Valiant (RC) and is more accurate, allowing you to letting it break Sneasler or Sneasler's and Volcarona's Substitute more reliably.
* Fiery Wrath is a standard Dark-type STAB move allowing you enables Galarian Moltres to beat Pokemon such as Iron Crown, Pecharunt, and Cresselia. move this up following previous comment
* Sucker Punch allows you it to win against Custap Berry users like Urshifu-S (RC) and Skeledirge, as well as Liechi Berry Sneasler.
* The EV spread allows you to lets Galarian Moltres survive to Modest Choice Specs Porygon-Z Hyper Beam (RC) as well as a Choice Band Haxorus Outrage.
* As Galarian Moltres struggles to beat bulky Fairy- add hyphen and Steel types Steel-types like Sylveon, Primarina, Corviknight, (AC) and Registeel (RC) as well as Electric types Electric-types like Iron Hands (RC) then Steel types . (AP) Thus. Steel-typeslike Iron Crown and Metagross, (AC) Ground-types or Ground types like Ursaluna and Landorus-Therian Landorus-T, as well as Fire types and Fire-types like Volcanion or and Volcarona are good partners for it. this sentence is difficult to follow so I split it up. You are allowed to have more than one sentence per bullet point, so if something is getting long, break it up

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