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Copyediting I am still water(Iron Defense Garganacl) [QC 2/2] [GP 0/1]

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[SET]
Iron Defense (Garganacl) @ Leftovers
Ability: Purifying Salt
EVs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD
Tera Type: Water
Careful Nature
- Iron Defense
- Body Press
- Salt Cure
- Recover

[SET COMMENTS]
With fantastic bulk, Salt Cure, Purifying Salt's status condition immunity, the combo of Iron Defense and Body Press, and reliable recovery, Garganacl establishes itself as a potent win condition. Iron Defense lets Garganacl boost its Defense to nearly unbreakable levels, which is complemented by Body Press. Body Press allows Garganacl to threaten the likes of Kingambit, Ting-Lu, and Weavile, and with Iron Defense boosts, Garganacl’s Body Press becomes more threatening, 2HKOing the likes of Iron Treads and Kyurem after just one boost. In tandem with Salt Cure, Gliscor can eventually be beaten with enough Iron Defense boosts. Salt Cure pressures would be switch-ins like Ogerpon-W, Gholdengo, and Dondozo. Leftovers adds even more to Garganacl's excellent survivability, allowing it to conserve valuable Recover PP, further complemented by Iron Defense boosts that enhance its effective health against physical attacks. Tera Water allows Garganacl to resist Steel-type and Water-type moves that threaten it, such as Make It Rain and Tachyon Cutter from Gholdengo and Iron Crown, respectively, and Razor Shell and Ivy Cudgel from Ogerpon-W, respectively. It also removes Garganacl’s weakness to Ground-type moves, making it even harder for Great Tusk and Dragonite to break through it. Tera Electric grants a Steel resistance while lacking weaknesses, and the singular Ground weakness it has is offset by most Ground-type attacks being Physical, which, with Iron Defense Boosts, can be offset. However, Ground-type coverage from Enamorus and Kyurem still threatens Garganacl. Tera Fairy is a strong middleground Tera, which comes with a Dark resistance, which is useful against Kingambit and Hisuian Samurott and Dragon immunity, useful against Raging Bolt and Walking Wake.

Garganacl fits on balance and bulky offense teams that can support its Iron Defense sweeps and cover its hazard vulnerability. Hazards set by Ting-Lu, Ogerpon-W, and Clefable complement Garganacl’s Salt Cure pressure and the switches it forces with Iron Defense boosting. Ogerpon-W in particular can pressure Great Tusk, Gliscor, and Ting-Lu, allowing Garganacl to preserve more HP for other physical threats, and can function as a pivot by virtue of forcing out these Ground-types and using U-turn to bring Garganacl in safely, or as a breaker threatening Hatterene and Calm Mind Clefable, which Garganacl struggles against. In return, Garganacl can take on Dragapult and Dragonite if Garganacl opts to Terastalize, which can check Ogerpon-W. Great Tusk and Iron Treads synergize nicely with Garganacl, as their Rapid Spin does not clear away hazards set by other teammates, such as Ogerpon-W and Clefable. In return, Garganacl checks Dragapult and Zapdos for Great Tusk, and for Iron Treads, Garganacl checks Fire-types such as Cinderace and Ceruledge. Gholdengo checks many of Garganacl's difficult matchups, such as Clefable, Hatterene, Galarian Slowking, and Galarian Weezing, which all threaten or cripple Garganacl. Defoggers such as Corviknight and Galarian Weezing are great partners as well, both can compress hazard remover, and as a check to Rillaboom, Ogerpon-W, and Zamazenta, which greatly threaten this Garganacl set without any boosts. While not packing any hazard removal of their own, Moltres, Tornadus-T, and Dragapult can all similarly function as checks to some of the aforementioned Pokemon as well as for other Grass-types such as Hydrapple and Sinistcha, while Garganacl checks Zapdos for the former two, and Choice Scarf Enamorus for the latter. While this Garganacl set fully invests in special defense, special walls such as Galarian-Slowking and Ting-Lu can cover for special attackers such as Raging Bolt, Iron Crown, and Gholdengo that would greatly weaken Garganacl otherwise.

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GrimtheImpy said:
[SET]
Iron Defense (Garganacl) @ Leftovers
Ability: Purifying Salt
EVs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD
Tera Type: Water
Careful Nature
- Iron Defense
- Body Press
- Salt Cure
- Recover

[SET COMMENTS]
Paragraph 1
- the role that the Pokemon plays;
- coverage moves that affect its role, there's no need to explain simple STAB moves unless they're slashed;
- a description of the EV spread in one sentence or less; don't focus on "default" things like maximum Attack investment, do give reasoning behind the benchmarks chosen;
- an explanation of Tera types used and why they're beneficial.

Paragraph 2
- a brief example of teammates that benefit from the analysed Pokemon's presence;
- a brief example of foes that the analysed Pokemon is vulnerable to + teammates to help cover them.

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Can you get this QC ready by Wednesday? If not, we'll have to reassign
 
Sorry for the delay; work's been absolutely killing me.

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[SET]
Iron Defense (Garganacl) @ Leftovers
Ability: Purifying Salt
EVs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD
Tera Type: Water
Careful Nature
- Iron Defense
- Body Press
- Salt Cure
- Recover

[SET COMMENTS]
With fantastic bulk, Salt Cure, the combo of Iron Defense and Body Press, and reliable recovery, Garganacl establishes itself as a potent win condition I know Purifying Salt is basically just dex info for this mon, but I think mentioning its status immunity is worthwhile here; other bulky wincons don't have full status immunities like Garg does and as such are either scared of Toxic/Malignant Chain, can get Frozen by Kyurem if they're trying to play the long game against it, or can get haxed one too many times by Paralysis or forced to click Recover more because of Burn chip. Don't include all that, though; just mentioning Purifying Salt will suffice; if that becomes redundant later on we can CMS it out. Iron Defense lets Garganacl boost its Defense to nearly unbreakable levels, which is complemented by Body Press. Body Press allows Garganacl to deal good damage to the likes of Kingambit, Ting-Lu, and Weavile, and with Iron Defense boosts, Garganacl’s Body Press becomes more threatening, 2HKOing the likes of Cinderace, Iron Treads, and Kyurem after just 1 one boost and becoming more potent with extra boosts. Salt Cure pressures would be switch-ins like Ogerpon-W, Gholdengo, and Landorus-T.. Leftovers adds even more to Garganacl's excellent survivability, allowing it to conserve valuable Recover PP gain a lot of value when Garganacl stays on the field as the little healing adds up, especially with Iron Defense boosts try to reword this part. I know what you mean, but I'm not sure if this entirely conveys how Garg's added survivability against physical attackers complements the chip healing from Lefties.. Tera Water allows Garganacl to resist Steel-type and Water-type moves that threaten it, such as Bullet Punch and Tachyon Cutter from Scizor and Iron Crown, respectively, and Sharpness-boosted Water attacks and Ivy Cudgel It's Wellspring, so the Water-type move in question's pretty apparent. from Hisuian-Samurott and Ogerpon-Wellspring. It also removes Garganacl’s weakness to Ground-type moves, making it even harder for Great Tusk and Dragonite to break through it.

Garganacl fits on balance and bulky offense teams that can support its Iron Defense sweeps and cover its hazard vulnerability the way this reads currently seems like they'd be supporting its hazard vulnerability, which wouldn't make sense in context. Hazards set by Ting-Lu, Ogerpon-W, and Clefable complement Garganacl’s Salt Cure pressure and the switches it forces with Iron Defense boosting. Ogerpon-W in particular can pressure Great Tusk, Gliscor, and Ting-Lu, allowing Garganacl to preserve more HP for other physical threats, and can function as a pivot by virtue of threatening forcing out these Ground-types and using U-turn to bring Garganacl in safely. Garganacl and Hazard removers such as Great Tusk, Corviknight, and Weezing-Galar are excellent partners for Garganacl. A bit redundant since you cover Great Tusk individually, and then cover the Defoggers in their own separate sentence. I think those excerpts are good enough. Great Tusk synergizes nicely with Garganacl as its Rapin Spin does not clear away hazards set by other teammates, such as Ogerpon-W and Clefable,. iIn return. Garganacl checks Dragapult and Pecharunt, which spinblock and threaten Great Tusk. The defoggers Corviknight and Galarian Weezing offer their own advantages, as both can check RIllaboom, Ogerpon-W, and Zamazenta which greatly threaten this Garganacl set without any boosts. While this Garganacl set fully invests in special defense, special walls such as Galarian-Slowking and Ting-Lu can cover for special attackers such as Raging Bolt, Iron Crown, and Gholdengo that would greatly weaken Garganacl otherwise. Heatran can compress a specially defensive wall, hazard setter, and an answer to many of Garganacl’s checks, such as Weezing-Galar, Gholdengo, and Rillaboom. Ghost-types such as Pecharunt and Gholdengo also function well with Garganacl as spinblockers for the hazards Garganacl appreciates and as a check to Zamazenta.

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Nice work overall! This will be QC 1/2 once implemented!
 
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A fair bit to unpack but most of it should be somewhat straightforward, or at least I hope so, except for the extra Tera-types but I tried to provide as much info on them as possible and you can decide what to include. Please let me know once it is implemented and I can give it another look, mainly looking to revisit one sentence in the second paragraph.

[SET]
Iron Defense (Garganacl) @ Leftovers
Ability: Purifying Salt
EVs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD
Tera Type: Water
Careful Nature
- Iron Defense
- Body Press
- Salt Cure
- Recover

[SET COMMENTS]
With fantastic bulk, Salt Cure, Purifying Salt's status condition immunity, the combo of Iron Defense and Body Press, and reliable recovery, Garganacl establishes itself as a potent win condition. Iron Defense lets Garganacl boost its Defense to nearly unbreakable levels, which is complemented by Body Press. Body Press allows Garganacl to deal good damage to the likes of Kingambit, Ting-Lu, and Weavile, and with Iron Defense boosts, Garganacl’s Body Press becomes more threatening, 2HKOing the likes of Cinderace, Iron Treads, and Kyurem after just one boost and becoming more potent with extra boosts. Kyurem is a fair mention, think it would be good to mention Gliscor over Cinderace and Iron Treads since its a Pokemon you would not be able to beat without ID boosts Salt Cure pressures would be switch-ins like Ogerpon-W, Gholdengo, and Landorus-T. Dondozo. Better to have a Pokemon that doesnt mind ID / BP too much Leftovers adds even more to Garganacl's excellent survivability, allowing it to conserve valuable Recover PP further complemented by Iron Defense boosts that enhance it's effective health against physical attacks. Tera Water allows Garganacl to resist Steel-type and Water-type moves that threaten it, such as Bullet Punch and Tachyon Cutter from Scizor and Iron Crown, I would change Scizor's Bullet Punch for Gholdengo's Make It Rain. The latter is much more impactful, and Scizor may be beaten with ID boosts respectively, and Water attacks from Hisuian-Samurott and Ogerpon-Wellspring. and Razor Shell and Ivy Cudgel from Ogerpon-W, respectively. You already mentioned Water-type moves above. You dont have to add this exactly, but specify the moves in a way that works with the prior sentence It also removes Garganacl’s weakness to Ground-type moves, making it even harder for Great Tusk and Dragonite to break through it. Add Tera Electric and Fairy mentions, both fairly popular Teras. The former excels thanks to its lack of weaknesses, particularly granting Garganacl with a Steel resistance like Water does, while the ID boosts means that physical Ground-type attackers such as Great Tusk and Iron Treads may not beat you, though it does leave you vulnerable to them without the boosts and to Earth Power from the likes of Kyurem and Enamorus. Tera Fairy meanwhile is the usual neutral Tera that meets middlegrounds, not weak to Ground like Tera Electric, not weak to Grass like Tera Water, gives you a Dark resist for Kingambit, a Dragon resist for Walking Wake, yet does not remove your Steel weakness and is thus rarer.

Garganacl fits on balance and bulky offense teams that can support its Iron Defense sweeps and cover its hazard vulnerability. Hazards set by Ting-Lu, Ogerpon-W, and Clefable complement Garganacl’s Salt Cure pressure and the switches it forces with Iron Defense boosting. Ogerpon-W in particular can pressure Great Tusk, Gliscor, and Ting-Lu, allowing Garganacl to preserve more HP for other physical threats, and can function as a pivot by virtue of forcing out these Ground-types and using U-turn to bring Garganacl in safely. Ogerpon-W also appreciates Garganacl taking on Dragapult, or even Dragonite after Tera. Could also mention how Ogerpon-W threatens Pokemon like Hatterene and Calm Mind Clefable Great Tusk synergizes nicely with Garganacl as its Rapin Spin does not clear away hazards set by other teammates, such as Ogerpon-W and Clefable, in return. Garganacl checks Dragapult and Pecharunt, which spinblock and threaten Great Tusk. Could restructure to mention Iron Treads, with Garganacl taking on the likes of Iron Moth and Cinderace for it. Corviknight and Galarian Weezing offer their own advantages, as both can check RIllaboom, Ogerpon-W, and Zamazenta which greatly threaten this Garganacl set without any boosts. Adjust to add Moltres as another Pokemon that checks them. While this Garganacl set fully invests in special defense, special walls such as Galarian-Slowking and Ting-Lu can cover for special attackers such as Raging Bolt, Iron Crown, and Gholdengo that would greatly weaken Garganacl otherwise. This mentions seems tricky. If possible, please leave it as is for now as to not overwhelm you even more, and you can list these 3 Pokemon as something that Iron Treads checks in the sentence above. Heatran can compress a specially defensive wall, hazard setter, and an answer to many of Garganacl’s checks, such as Weezing-Galar, Gholdengo, and Rillaboom. This one iskinda eh, their defensive profile is too similar to the point one of them would have to Tera, probably Garg, at which point Gholdengo is not a check for example Ghost-types such as Pecharunt and Gholdengo also function well with Garganacl as spinblockers for the hazards Garganacl appreciates and as a check to Zamazenta. Too overkill, not much Garganacl specific

- Tornadus-T and Dragapult are more offensive teammates that check the Grass-types and Zamazenta, notably they also check Hydrapple which the defensive Pokemon above might have a harder time doing.

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QC 2/2 after implemented, thank you.

[SET]
Iron Defense (Garganacl) @ Leftovers
Ability: Purifying Salt
EVs: 252 HP / 4 Def / 252 SpD
Tera Type: Water
Careful Nature
- Iron Defense
- Body Press
- Salt Cure
- Recover

[SET COMMENTS]
With fantastic bulk, Salt Cure, Purifying Salt's status condition immunity, the combo of Iron Defense and Body Press, and reliable recovery, Garganacl establishes itself as a potent win condition. Iron Defense lets Garganacl boost its Defense to nearly unbreakable levels, which is complemented by Body Press. Body Press allows Garganacl to deal good damage to threaten the likes of Kingambit, Ting-Lu, and Weavile, and with Iron Defense boosts, Garganacl’s Body Press becomes more threatening, 2HKOing the likes of Iron Treads and Kyurem after just one boost and becoming more potent with extra boosts. Flavor text Gliscor, in particular, can have its healing offset by extra Iron Defense Boosts. I get what you are trying to say but it reads a bit confusing Salt Cure pressures would be switch-ins like Ogerpon-W, Gholdengo, and Dondozo. Leftovers adds even more to Garganacl's excellent survivability, allowing it to conserve valuable Recover PP, further complemented by Iron Defense boosts that enhance its effective health against physical attacks. Tera Water allows Garganacl to resist Steel-type and Water-type moves that threaten it, such as Make It Rain and Tachyon Cutter from Gholdengo and Iron Crown, respectively, and Razor Shell and Ivy Cudgel from Ogerpon-W, respectively. It also removes Garganacl’s weakness to Ground-type moves, making it even harder for Great Tusk and Dragonite to break through it. Tera Electric grants a Steel resistance while lacking weaknesses, and the singular Ground weakness it has is offset by most Ground-type attacks being Physical, which, with Iron Defense Boosts, can be offset. However, Ground-type coverage from Enamorus and Kyurem still threatens Garganacl. Tera Fairy is a strong middleground Tera, which comes with a Dark resistance, which is useful against Kingambit and Hisuian Samurott and Dragon immunity, useful against Raging Bolt and Walking Wake.

Garganacl fits on balance and bulky offense teams that can support its Iron Defense sweeps and cover its hazard vulnerability. Hazards set by Ting-Lu, Ogerpon-W, and Clefable complement Garganacl’s Salt Cure pressure and the switches it forces with Iron Defense boosting. Ogerpon-W in particular can pressure Great Tusk, Gliscor, and Ting-Lu, allowing Garganacl to preserve more HP for other physical threats, and can function as a pivot by virtue of forcing out these Ground-types and using U-turn to bring Garganacl in safely, (AC) Less of a grammar suggestions, moreso me trying to suggest to separate your ideas so they read well or as a breaker threatening Hatterene and Calm Mind Clefable, which Garganacl struggles against. In return, Garganacl can take on Dragapult and Dragonite after Tera, Not sure its clear if Dragonite or Garganacl is the one clicking Tera which can check Ogerpon-W. Great Tusk and Iron Treads synergize nicely with Garganacl, as its Rapin Spin does not clear away hazards set by other teammates, such as Ogerpon-W and Clefable, in return. Garganacl checks Dragapult and Pecharunt, which spinblock and A bit too much, not much to do with Garganacl at this point threaten Great Tusk while checking Fire-types such as Cinderace and Ceruledge for Iron Treads. Who is checking the Fire-types? Garganacl right? Its not very clear Gholdengo further plays into a hazard-stacking playstyle, blocking Defog from Corviknight and Rapid Spin from opposing Great Tusk and Iron Treads, while checking IronPress Zamazenta and Hatterene, which both threaten Garganacl. Defoggers such as Corviknight and Galarian Weezing are great partners as well, despite clearing the user’s hazards, both can compress hazard remover, You are focusing way too much on entry hazards, given that Garganacl does not have hazards itself nor is it present only on hazard stack. Try to remove at least part of this, mainly Gholdengo blocking Defog; instead you can add other Pokemon that Gholdengo deals wtih such as Galarian Weezing, Clefable, and Galarian Slowking. and as a check to Rillaboom, Ogerpon-W, and Zamazenta, which greatly threaten this Garganacl set without any boosts. While not packing any hazard removal of their own, Moltres, Tornadus-T, and Dragapult can all similarly function as checks to some of the aforementioned Pokemon as well as for other Grass-types such as Hydrapple and Sinistcha, while Garganacl checks Zapdos for the former two, and Choice Scarf Enamorus for the latter. While this Garganacl set fully invests in special defense, special walls such as Galarian-Slowking and Ting-Lu can cover for special attackers such as Raging Bolt, Iron Crown, and Gholdengo that would greatly weaken Garganacl otherwise.

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